Tuesday, September 27, 2011

Show Don't Tell

It looked like a haunted house.

"Sammy!", Athena cried as her yellow lab Sammy ran after a stray tabby cat. She started after him, and follwed him down the street. She sprinted after him, starining to keep up. As Sammy ran ater the cat, he became less and less visable.
"Sammy,come back!", Athena shouted,as a last effort before she had to stop and catch her breath. Athena panted, out of breath and started to worry if she would be able to find Sammy. After catching her breath, Athena started jogging in the direction she last saw Sammy. It took her down a dark street, where she could faintly see a, "Dead End" sign at the end o the road. At the very end of the road was a omnious looking house with boards of woods nailed over the windows. She glanced around her, thinking Sammy might have gone another direction when she heard a dog bark.
"Sammy?", she hollard. She looked in the direction of the sound and was staring back at the house. Only then did she notice the front door of the house was open.
A cold shiever ran up her spine as she heard Sammy bark again. He was in that house. The house almost seemed to look back at her as she stood staring at it. The paint was chipped, and the front-yard was un-kept giving the house an even creepier look.

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